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Modern Shinobi: Revelations

This is my new fanfic. Here’s the set up: This story takes place in the modern day Naruzepverse where everything Kishimoto has written up until now still happened. Also elements of my other stories are referenced, though not many since I still want this to have it’s own life.
Since this story takes place in modern times, as the title suggest, I need to establish a history. And since the manga is still going, and we don’t know the outcome as of yet, in this universe Naruto defeated Sasuke, and the two joined forces to defeat Tobi (I still refuse to call him Madara) and end the Great Ninja War. Whether this is to happen in the actual manga, or not, is irrelevant for the purpose of this fanfic.
I hope those reading this fanfic understands why such changes had to be made. Also to make things flow faster, I’m going to do a {Trivia} section, in which I’m going to add tidbits on certain things (historic facts, name translations, minor explanations, etc.) instead of dragging the story with boring explanations. Thank you, and enjoy.

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Chapter 1: Revelations

Timeline: 200 years after the last Great Ninja War.

Location: Wakaba* City. (*New Leaves)

 It was a regular friday afternoon in the City of New Leaves. Children were just getting out of school, getting ready to enjoy the weekend. Except for 17 year old Kaze Uzumaki, who stayed after school for detention. His offense, the usual, a fight at school with whoever happened to tick him off that day. With so many detentions, it’s a surprise he hasn’t been suspended from his school, Wakaba High.

It was Kaze’s hot blooded temper, along with his wild orange hair, and ‘whisker-like’ scars on his cheek that earned him the nickname ‘Hinote no Kitsune’ (Fox of blaze) among the student body. His constant anger outburst. caused most of the students not to like him, and constantly try to avoid him. However, not all the students of Wakaba High School hate him. Some, few as they are, embrace him for who he is. “Yo, Firefox! Where you going?” asked Unarimaru Inuzuka, or Unari as his friends call him. “Where you think? His usual after school pit stop.” answered Komuri Nara, another of Kaze’s friends. “Oh. Alright, see’ya after detention!” stated Unari as Kaze made his way inside the classroom.

“Who was it today, Kaze-san?” expressed his homeroom teacher. “That smug Uchiha kid, Umino-sensei.” “What am I going to do with you?” Tarumu smiled after giving out a purposed sigh.  Kaze was fortunate to have Tarumu Umino as his homeroom teacher; he was as his name states, relaxed, loose, and a bit of a slacker. “Well, you know what to do.” calmly stated Tarumu, as he motioned Kaze to his seat.”pshst” is all that came out of Kaze’s mouth.

Though he gave the appearance of hating detention, Kaze has grown to get used to it. He’s been there so many times that Tarumu lets him do whatever he wants, as long as he keeps to himself. Kaze mostly uses detention to read some of his books. Though he may not look like it, Kaze is pretty fond of reading, and is a pretty smart kid. Today he was reading one of his all time favorites: “The Tale of the Utterly Gutsy Shinobi.” This book has been a part of his family for ages. It has been passed down from one Uzumaki to the next for generations. One thing that always confused him however, was the fact that there was no author to attribute the piece to. No mention of who wrote this book could be found anywhere within it’s pages. It always made him wonder why, but he enjoyed the book nonetheless.

After a few hours Tarumu broke the silence. “You’re free to go Kaze.” Kaze placed his leaf into the book to kark his place. ” ‘Bout time. Same time tomorrow, Sensei?” joked Kaze. “Hope not. I think I spend more time with you that my family.” They both laghed. ‘Try to stay out of trouble, would’ya. Unlike you, some of us don’t like staying after school.” chuckled the teacher. “Will do, Umino-sensei.” smiled Kaze.

Outside his friends were waiting patiently for Kaze to meet with them. “Took you long enough. Now it looks like we’re going to have to walk in the rain. Man, my ponytail is going to get messed up.” Kumori expressed his discomfort, while staring at the clouds. He was the same age as Kaze, a bit taller though. “Yeah, and Kiba is going to get all wet!” added Unarimaru, a year younger than his companions. “You know, I don’t remember asking you two to wait for me.” replied Kaze. After a silent pause, the three friends burst into laughter. It was silenced by Kaze showing concern as he began walking.  “Where’s Hatsuhi?” “She was picked up by her brother a while ago. Said she had to go to some Hyuga Family thing.” came an answer from Kumori, as he and Unari followed. “Psh. Hyuga. Always think they’re better than everyone. I mean Hatsuhi is cool, but I don’t know about the rest of them though.” added Unari. “At least they aren’t like the Uchiha, right?” Another laugh session ensued.

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After walking for a good couple of blocks, the three friends noticed something peculiar. “Is it just me, or has the guy behind us been following us for some time now?” “Your senses are accurate as always Unari.” agreed Kaze. “He started back at the convenience store, three blocks ago.” perceived Kumori, the smart one of the group. “I don’t like it. And neither does Kiba. Calm down, boy” said Unarimaru, as he attended to his equally worried pet. Kumori quickly devised a plan. “Listen up, he’s just one man. He can’t be following all of us. That’s be to stupid, we outnumber him. So this is what we’re going to do.  Unari, you take Kiba and make a right on the next street. I’ll go left, Kaze will head straight. Whoever he continues to follow, the other two will back him up. Watch your backs, just in case.”

As they approached said street, the plan took to action. Unari went right with Kiba, while Kumori went left, leaving Kaze by himself. Kaze appeared to be who the lone man was after. Kumori and Unari waited a couple of second before they headed back towards Kaze’s direction. However, something didn’t fit. Kaze had banished, along with the mystery man. “DUDE! Where’s Kaze!?” growled Unari. “I don’t know! This makes no sense! I purposely chose this intersection to separate because all three ways don’t have much communing, and have a long stretch. We should be able to see them.” “Dude, we’re the only one’s here!” expressed Unari. “I CAN see that!” emphasized Kumori, as he thought to himself “What the hell happened?” 

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After walking fo a bit Kaze started to get concerned. “Where are those two? And what happened to the guy that was following me? For that matter, where am I?” Kaze didn’t recognize anything surrounding him. The street he has traveled many a time looked nothing like it should. In matter of fact, it didn’t look like a street at all. Kaze was in the middle of a forest. “You seem lost.” a voice was heard. “Who’s there? Who said …” Kaze’s questions were interrupted “…that? Is that what you were going to ask? Funny how everyone asks the same thing. I bet ‘Where am I?’ was going to be the following one, am I right?”
“Well, smart-ass, since you brought it up. Where am …”
“You’re in the same location you were just a minute ago.”
“Stop messing with me! I’m not stupid! This looks nothing like …”
“Because I choose it to look this way. That’s why! Now shut up and listen. Your life could be in danger, but you could save it if you listen to me!”
“…” Kaze had no idea what was going on. But for one reason, or another, he decided to cooperate.
“You’re in something called a Genjutsu. An illusion. One I am in control of. I could make your brain splatter. Nail you to a cross for eternity. Send you to a never ending drown. Anything I wish, I could make happen. But, I’m not going to make any of that happen. Because, believe it or not, I’m here to help you.”

Now Kaze really didn’t know what was going on. Genjutsu? Is that even possible. That only existed in the stories he liked to read. It couldn’t be real. Something’s wasn’t right. Who is this guy. “How good are you at History, young Uzumaki?”
“How you know my name…”
“ANSWER THE QUESTION!”
“I’m not an expert, if that’s what you’re looking for. But know enough, i guess.” a safe answer. In reality it was one of Kaze’s favorite subjects.
“What do you know of your surname? Your heritage? Your ancestors?” continued the ominous voice.
“Uzumaki, umm, it means whirlpool. I think?” now Kaze was just playing with him.
” I’m not looking for a damn definition!! Don’t toy with me boy!!”
“Then, what do you want from me!”
“To release yourself from this Genjutsu.”
“What!? I don’t know how to do that!”
“Of coarse you don’t. All knowledge of Ninjutsu has been erased from your modern teachings. I’ll be surprised if you could even make a clone of yourself.”
Ninjutsu? Clone? More terms used in books Kaze read. What was this guy talking about?
“What if I told you that everything you read in those precious books of yours were true. All the abilities. All the wars. All the stories. True.”
“What?! Those are just stories. Nothing more. That stuff can’t be real. Stories, nothing more. That stuff doesn’t exist.”
“And yet, here you are. Stuck on one of those abilities, that ‘don’t exist.'”
“…”
“I can’t tell you everything, right now. But if you’re interested, and you should, meet me here.” The landscape changed from a forest setting to what looked like an old village with a mountain with faces carved on them at the end of it. “Do you know where and what this is?”
“Yes, of coarse. Who doesn’t? It’s ‘The Hidden Village’. It’s one of our country’s natural landmarks.”
“Meet me there. Tomorrow. ALONE!”

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“But nobody’s allowed in there! Not ever tourist! And it’s heavily guarded by the military!” Suddenly Kaze found himself talking to himself. And not only that but, Kaze was back at the same location he was before he started hearing that strange man’s voice. “Dude, there he is!” exclaimed Unari as he and Kumori made their way towards their friend. “Where were you guys all this time?! I thought you were going to have my back?” exclaimed Kaze. “What you mean? We only lost you for a couple of seconds.” assured Kumori. “A couple of seconds? I had a whole conversation with that guy. It seemed like minutes passed by.” thought Kaze out loud. “That guy! Where that guy go?” asked Unari as he looked around. “Don’t know.” said Kaze. “When we came back to find you, you were alone. We don’t know where he went.” stated Kumori. “It’s as if he banished.” added Unari.

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{Trivia}

Kaze = Wind (for those who didn’t know already); Tarumu = to slacken, to loosen, to relax; Unari = groan, roar, howl, growl, bellow, sough; Kumori = cloudiness, cloudy weather, shadow; Hatsuhi = New Year’s Day sunrise

Ninjutsu is hasn’t been practiced – openly – in over 100 years. (This will be explained on later chapters)

Wakabi City was founded by Heiji Uzumaki: a descendant of both Naruto Uzumaki and Sasuke Uchiha. (Heiji = time of peace)

Kiba is a white husky with gray fur on his back and outlining his face. He has yellow eyes. He’s 1 year old.

Hatsuhi and Kaze openly like each other, but aren’t in a relationship.

Konoha is known in modern times as simply ‘The Hidden Village’. It’s like ‘The Forbidden City’ in China, only that it’s not a tourist attraction.

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22 Responses

  1. Alright FacFic Army (that’s what i’m calling anyone who still writes fanfics in this site. lol.) my new FanFic is up. Let the New FanFic Revolution commence!! We need more FanFics!!

  2. ill get to reading it tonight at work. im almost done my first one, but i doubt ill get it posted before midweek next week.

  3. That’s cool. Don’t forget to Proofread. Look forward to it.

  4. zepwolfx …

    speechless …
    good back drop, good setup, i’m eager to see what you come up with

    Suggestions : don’t go explaining all of your history in one go .. you will find the appropriate place to reveal them .. i really couldn’t judge the pace of the story, but seems that you want to rush to the opening plot.

    love the names espicially WAKABA CITY can tell you enough how good and appropriate it sounds

    Keep up the good work, and cheers

  5. @DevilsRage: Thanks man. Means alot. I didn’t ‘really’ explained all of the history. Just a brief summary. I am going to wait for the appropriate time to do so. I’m off to write chapter 2. Will prop post it next week, as to not overload the site. lol.

  6. Wow…
    That. was. awesome! :D` Your fanfic has put my “Invisible” to shame. >.> But seriously, this was a very good read. I’m looking forward to chapter two. (:

  7. This has made me think if I should continue with “Invisible,” or just scrap it and start with a new story. Hmm…

  8. I haven’t read invisible, so I can’t comment. However, I can tell you from experience that you should think about where you’re going with the story, and if you’re happy with it. I was happy with the many ideas I had for NGS, but I really didn’t know where I was going with it. I had a beginning, and a lot of middle, but I had no end. That was reason for scrapping it, and deciding to start fresh. I actually had this idea in my head for a while, and after reading some of the latest fanfics on this site, I decided to give it a go.

  9. It seems “Invisible” is passed by everyone, while the other fanfics get noticed. That’s always been the case with my fanfics, I guess. :/

  10. Well, I haven’t been here in a while. [<—- understatement of the century] So link it, so I can read it.

  11. Also, there are four other chapters. Just click my name in the sidebar and you’ll see ’em.

  12. I like this fanfic already, Zep! It’s really good and I’m going to make sure I read this one for now on. I also hope you have read my fanfic “Revenge of the YellowFlash”. I need to proofread more but I think you would like it if you already haven’t read it.

  13. I also think I know where you are going with the story but I won’t say anything if you don’t want me to.

  14. people are free to discuss opinions, yellowflash2. That’s what make stories fun. lol. I just won’t agree or disagree, as to not spoil anything. And yes I’m reading your fanfic. I’m waiting on your next one. Don’t forget to link up the rest of them, in case I missed any.

  15. Good chap zep. I like how you basicly wiped the slate clean. In the ninja world. Should give a lot of options to you as it pertains to the plot in the future

  16. Whoa, Zep. Your fanfic is awesome.

    I really liked how it’s set in the future and everything has changed. No ninjutsu, taijutsu or genjutsu and I can’t wait to find out what happened to them.

    Your writing style is great. I especially liked these parts:

    “This book has been a part of his family for ages. It has been passed down from one Uzumaki to the next for generations. One thing that always confused him however, was the fact that there was no author to attribute the piece to. No mention of who wrote this book could be found anywhere within it’s pages. It always made him wonder why, but he enjoyed the book nonetheless.”
    It feels mysterious. Why didn’t Naruto and the Uzumakis write Jiraiya’s name in the book? He was a great shinobi and he was Naruto’s godfather, so there must be a good reason.

    “You’re in something called a Genjutsu. An illusion. One I am in control of. I could make your brain splatter. Nail you to a cross for eternity. Send you to a never ending drown. Anything I wish, I could make happen. But, I’m not going to make any of that happen. Because, believe it or not, I’m here to help you.”
    This ninja must be strong and I wonder why he can still use genjutsu. I hope he’s not Tobi, because he’d be almost 300 years old.

    Great job and I can’t wait for the next chapter.

  17. awesome fanfic wish something like this could be a part 3 of naruto(if there ever comes one)

  18. That’s zep for ya, only one chapter and half the site is addicted already 😛

    also the thing that kills most fanfics is the breaks. one fanfic each 2-3 weeks is good enough but some publish for 5 weeks in a row and then we see nothing for 3 months and everyone reads it but has forgotten about the story and eventually no one reads it anymore.

  19. I am seriously jealous Zep. One day and you already have more comments than I do! I guess people just know you better. Still, great chapter and I’m really looking forward to more. The writing style is pretty good, and the plot has some new aspects in it I havent seen in other “Future Gen” fanfics. I do have like two questions though.

    1) “The tale of the utterly gutsy shinobi”. Now, from what I know, Jiraiya’s book was called “The tale of the gutsy shinobi” so either one of us got the translation or more likely (or at least a more fun possiblilty) the book is a sequel written by Naruto. And i have to say that erasing Jiraiya or Naruto’s name from the author’s section of the book must mean some seriously heavy jutsu went down to erase all known knowledge of Jutsu from the world.

    2) In (what I’m calling) “The Great Purge” of Jutsu did it include all aspects of Jutsu. I can’t see someone really putting a stop to taijutsu, after all people will always try to learn how to fight, though severel taijutsu forms demand extra-human capabilities such as super speed and leaping stories up (such as Lee and Gai’s style). Kenjutsu, or Weapons training in general also goes along the same road as Taijutsu, hell we still practice swordsmanship today. Fuinjutsu or Sealing for those who dont know the translation, is also a rare but powerful tool that not many people are good at. Would it have been allowed to survive on account of it’s usefullness, or was it too destroyed? After all it is just writing things on paper or such things and imbuing it with Chakra. Finally Kekkei Genkai. Are they still around?

    Well that was pretty much all I wanted to say. Again, great chapter and I’m really looking forward to your next chapter. Oh, and dont miss mine coming out tomorrow!
    Suna OUT!

  20. @WS: Yeah, see what you mean. I’m one of the ones that used to do that. I would write something and then just stop. This time I’m commited to this one though. I already have the 2nd chapter ready. Just don’t want overlap someone’s posts.

    @Everyone else: thanks for the comments. I really appreciate it. Don’t worry all question will be answered at a later date.

    @Suna: That’s the translation I found in the Web-sphere. Every where I went, it said it was that translation, but you might be right. Still, it’s the same book Jiraiya wrote.
    The “Great purge” as you call it will be explained in chapter 3 or 4, depending on how long 3 will be.

  21. @ Anonymous Chair – I say keep going with Invisible, it was supposed to be a shorter fan fic, and it had a good direction, Suicide etc was something I was looking forward to seeing how you would write that scene specifically how the portrayal of that emotion will be shown…

    @ Zep – Banish was that supposed to be Vanish @_@

    Really awesome story, with no knowledge of Ninjutsu, etc, I would like to get a picture of what these modern times would look like, Military be like tanks etc, or like in Code Geass with those Knightmare Frames,

    Also like to know how the other Nations evolved and if the political system was still Fuedal or it also evolve to a more democratic or a plain dictatorship <_<

    All these questions @_@ that's what makes an awesome fan fic 😉

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